高三英语二轮复习精品课件（广东专用）第5模块基础写作专题1　记叙文型基础写作_高考复习指南

高三英语二轮复习精品课件（广东专用）第5模块基础写作专题1　记叙文型基础写作

　　第五模块 │ 题型探究

　　【写作要求】 1．应包含所给出的全部信息，开头和结尾已经给出，但不计入总句数； 2．必须使用5个句子组成连贯的短文。 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________. Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua 第五模块 │ 题型探究

　　【学生样本】 Dear Peter， I would like to tell you that our school has worked out a new program.①In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air, we plan to have more trees in our school now.②In order to get good places to study and live, we have many plans.③First, we plan to build a botanical garden and let students visit and use.④Second, we plan to build up a small garden for people to rest and study.⑤At last, we plan to build some statues of famous people to effect students and teachers. Welcome to our school if you have any chance. Yours， Li Hua 第五模块 │ 题型探究

　　【评论点拨】我们来看看学生的样本有什么地方可以改进：第①句：“In order to make our school beautiful and clean the air ”比较生硬， to make our school beautiful应该改为to make our school more beautiful；“we plan to have more trees in our school now”中的have改为plant会好些。第②句：没有涉及表格内的内容，是个废句，而且还霸占了后面的信息的位置。第③句：“First, we plan to build a botanical garden_and_let_students_visit_and_use.”中的画线部分没有表达出“供同学们参观、实践”的意思。第五模块 │ 题型探究