That day, I peeled peanuts with my good friend. At first, we thought it was a kind of fun, happily peeling. After half a play, my friend didn't want to peel. My friend went to watch TV five times. I was left alone and slowly peeling. I thought it was boring. I didn't want to peel, but I thought of what my mother often said to me - "always do things with perseverance!" Finally, I insisted, and finally a full plate of peanuts appeared in front of me! This is not only a small test for me, but also a test for my perseverance. Finally, I see my sea, see my results, I am so happy!
这就是我—一个可爱的女生!
This is me - a lovely girl!
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1.文章介绍“我”自己,除了对外貌进行描述外,还讲了自身的特点,既有有点也有缺点。结构完整,层次分明,重点突出,详略得当。
1. The article introduces "I" myself. In addition to describing the appearance, it also talks about its own characteristics, which have some shortcomings as well. The structure is complete, the level is clear, the focus is prominent, and the details are slightly appropriate.
2.文章首先是本着“丑话说在前头”的原则,很客观地做了自我检讨,将自己爱哭也爱骄傲的特点生动形象地揭露出来,又通过一件具体的事来体现出自己有始有终、有恒心的优点。
2. In the first place, based on the principle of "the ugly words are in the first place", the article makes an objective self-examination, reveals vividly the characteristics of crying and pride, and embodies the advantages of being consistent and consistent through a specific thing.
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