This article is divided into two types of volumes: 10 points (content) + 17 points (expression) + 15 points (Development). From the two aspects of expression and development, the article is worth mentioning: the language expression is hearty, there is no empty and gorgeous, but there is a poetic overflow between the lines; the elegance of material selection and modern contrast, the elegant "heart follows suwu" and "wind chases Sima", from the textbooks; the modern "earthquake resistance and disaster resistance" are moving fragments. But what's the problem? The point is vague, so that the article is separated from the eyes and soul of "starting with moving". The composition in the examination room must be pointed out. If it's not pointed out, it's likely to be off the topic. If it's not pointed out, it's likely to have prepared similar articles and copied them during the examination. If it's natural to place the questions, it means that the article doesn't run blindly without breaking away from the restriction. It means that the article is closely related to the title, so it should be. If we can repeat the questions properly in the article, we can make the clue of the article clear and the structure rigorous, and the content of each part can also strengthen the contact organically. The bracketed text in each part of the above article is added after upgrading, so that the three parts are "unified" to better represent the theme. Here, I would like to emphasize that the point of composition in the examination room is eye-catching. Point to understand the problem eye, "starting with moving" should be "starting", "moving with moving" belongs to the moving object structure, modifying "starting", so the end of the article is "moving", the point is "starting", in fact, the word "starting" can be expanded: "starting" for what? What is the meaning of "departure"? How to "start"? What is the belief of "starting"? And so on these all depend on the examinee's understanding and the extension. (Liu Dehai)
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