8年四川高考满分作文一步与一生_高中英语作文

8年四川高考满分作文一步与一生

枫竹林飘荡着幸福的歌谣，我回眸最初的那扇门，它闪着幽蓝幽蓝的光，我毫不犹豫地走了上去，迎接我期待的黄金般的人生！

Maple bamboo forest is floating with happy ballads. I look back at the original door, which is shining with blue light. I walk up without hesitation to meet the golden life I am looking forward to!

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本文是一篇议论性散文。首先，语言美丽，富于变化。作者善用比喻，把人生喻为两扇不同的门，这就把人生这一抽象的概念，化为了具体可感的形象。又如文章前4段，运用描写性语言，把读者带入了幽美的意境之中，起到了开篇即吸引人的作用。在主体部分，作者引入了六个历史人物为材料，但并不嫌繁琐，因为作者将这六个人物的事例分为两组，构成对比，既突出了中心，又有变化。前一组事例，用“曾经的……从这里走过”这一句式引出，具有整饬之美。后一组事例，则用“……从这里……”引出，既整洁，又与前面的一组句式不同，加上内容的区别，使文章整饬中有变化，不显得板滞沉闷，而是富于灵动变化。

This article is an argumentative essay. First of all, language is beautiful and varied. The author makes good use of metaphor and compares life to two different doors, which turns the abstract concept of life into a concrete and sensible image. As in the first four paragraphs of the article, the use of descriptive language brings the reader into a beautiful mood and plays an attractive role at the beginning. In the main part, the author introduces six historical figures as materials, but it is not too complicated, because the author divides the cases of these six figures into two groups, forming a contrast, which highlights the center and changes. In the former group, we use "once This sentence pattern leads to the beauty of neatness. For the latter group of cases, use "..." From here... " Lead out, not only neat, but also different from the previous set of sentence patterns, plus the difference of content, so that there is change in the article straightening, not dull, but full of flexible changes.