This is a composition rated 68. Its success can be summed up in the following points: first, high intention. "I want to hold the hand of the one who tells the truth", it is indeed higher than other ideas. In the real society, it's not easy to tell the truth. It takes courage. Sometimes it costs life. So it's precious to hold their hands. 2、 The structure is clear. The author wrote this composition after careful consideration. At the beginning, he directly presented his views. He summarized the whole paper with three key words of "respect", "support" and "determination". When explaining the reasons for "thinking", according to these three aspects in turn, the level is very clear, and the level is progressive, step by step enriching the connotation of "handshake". The last paragraph refers to the topic and the beginning, sublimation The main idea is to make the structure complete. 3、 Content enrichment. From a formal point of view, this is still a "syllogism" argumentative paper. The general argument is divided into three sub arguments, but there are abundant arguments and analysis under the sub arguments, so that the content is full and substantial. 4、 Fluent language. It is a more elegant argumentative paper.
[说三道四]
[gossip]
全文立足于虚化的“你”―――文学,以充满感情的文字表达内心深处要握住文学的手直到永远的心声。文中用“是你”、“还是你”、“依旧是你”层层推进方式多角度阐述了“为什么要紧握文学的手的理由”:文学让自己穿越时空;让生活变得丰富多彩;让自己感悟人生哲理。其间既有收放自如的铺陈,也有对文学内涵的思索。行文流畅,多使用排比等整句,情感充沛,有一气呵成的气势。值得一提的是首尾的语言,有了“与文学握手”的感染力,显示考生运用文字的综合能力。明显的缺点是引用过多,有掉书袋之嫌,显得朴实不足,华藻有余。其实,写自己对文学的感情,不在于知道了多少,而是自己和文学之间那种难分难舍的亲和力,使文学成为自己生命中重要的一部分。
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