点评:题目蕴含寓意,众所周知,眼睛是心灵的窗户,“看着眼睛”就是一种认知过程。“距离没了,心更近了,认识深了”是文章的题记,整文都围绕它展开,体现出精妙的构思。
Comments: the topic contains moral meaning. As we all know, the eye is the window of the mind, and "looking at the eye" is a cognitive process. "The distance is gone, the heart is closer, and the understanding is deeper" is the inscription of the article. The whole article is unfolded around it, reflecting the delicate idea.
该文是篇散文,采取了“蒙太奇”手法,将几个看似不相干的片断组辑一起,但“神聚”突出。文章选材不是简单的重合叠加,而是在不断拓展深化。文章以人鱼故事首尾照应,但却有着流动之感。
This article is an essay, which adopts the montage technique to collect several seemingly unrelated pieces together, but "God gathering" is outstanding. The article material selection is not a simple superposition, but is constantly expanding and deepening. The article takes the story of mermaid as its head and tail, but it has a sense of flowing.
总而言之,该文以散文的笔调、诗画的语言、巧妙的构思,成为了一道亮丽的风景,得满分无可厚非。
All in all, the essay has become a beautiful landscape with prose style, poetry and painting language, and ingenious conception. It is beyond reproach to get full marks.
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