But, more importantly, private schools have an upper hand in education quality, the underlying ingredient (这里相比之下,我觉得用 element 更好) in school assessment. Fewer students in each class share the resources, and, in the meantime, each is taken more care of by teachers, who, due to meritocracy (这个的短语在这里很莫名!!!) , are more accountable and learned, lifting the teaching efficiency and providing a better environment that is favorable for teenagers individuality development. In other words, they have to guarantee the teaching quality to enroll enough students, surviving the society (这里写得有点混乱,不知道想表达什么意思!) .
Not only do private schools offer children a chance to receive education of a higher standard, but also fuel a rise, on the average, in the level of education. (这种句子多写点,那么 8 分就跑不掉了,呵呵。。。非常好的句子!!!) Supposing that rapidly increasing students choose private schools rather than public ones, public schools, although they have annual limited education fund, are compelled to improve their education quality to ensure adequate applicants and escape the bad fortune closing their doors (估计又是受中文影响,写出这样的句子,稍微改改就对了) ,because of financial difficulties.
Most visibly, the blooming private schools justify the choice that children go to private ones (这句写得很变扭,关键是想用 justify 这个词后面加句子,所以导致的结果就是很不顺。可以写成: justify the students choice ,既简洁又明了) . That paves the way for childrens promising future.
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