雅思大作文点评：大学男生女生是否应一样多？_雅思英语写作

雅思大作文点评：大学男生女生是否应一样多？

　　下面是一篇剑桥5里面的题目,关于大学里面男学生和女学生是不是应该一样多。

　　Gender discrimination is always a topic in our society. Nowadays, an issue under discussion is whether equal numbers of male and female students should be enrolled in every subject by universityies. In my opinion, it is benificial to put emphasis on sexual equality. However, the request of accepting same numbers of boys and girls in every subject is overly simplistic.

　　点评:从结构和内容上来说,还不错,符合要求:前两句话过渡一下,交待背景信息,最后表达自己的观点.本段作者是通过两句话来表达观点,也未尝不可.

　　从语言角度来说,没有严重的错误,从句也得到了运用,但是还是有错。

　　There are mainly two reasons for me to say so. Firstly, individuals have their own rights to choose the subjects they enjoy. Thus, it is hard to say whether the number of these two different genders will coincidentally be the same in the end. Secondly, the society calls for different things from males and females. According to my experience, we have a special school named Female school in our university, the main subjects of which are intermedia, individual image design, photography and so on. Only girls can get enrolled in this school because the main goal of this school is to cultivate girls that not only can stand on their own fet after graduation, but also live a good life while they act as mothers or housewives in the future. There is no doubt that males and females will act different roles in society after graduation.