I am in favor of the Multi-cultural; first, because it promotes a climate of peace and prosperity, misunderstanding would not be occurred(occur没有被动语态!!!) between nations with the reason of(直接说for不就行了) racial differences and cultural differences(改成racial and cultural differences是不是更好呢). Take it(这个it指谁啊?!) for example, in the past of China, because of the semi-colonial and semi-feudal economy(中式英语,改成due to the semi-colonial and semi-feudal economy of China in the past是不是更好呢), the government close the country to international intercourse(这句话也太。。。完全不对) ,peoples life was very monotonous,(这里却连词!) they could not understanding the occidental civilization .but now, in nowadays ,as the government implements its reform and opening to the outside world, people could(整个句子缺谓语动词,明显是按照中文来写的,through是介词!) through all kinds of rode to acknowledge the other countrys cultural, they will adapt and absorb the western literature,custom,and the viewpoint with the things ,it will advance national unity.(116words)
语言方面:看了这段发现,作者在内容的安排上太有问题!没有详略得当,前两段写得很多,到后面越写越少!其次,写得那么多,错得更多!给人的感觉是写到后面很混乱!明显感觉到中文的痕迹和口语式作文的痕迹!
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