此文回答了两个问题,但是在回答第一个问题时,并没有充分讨论问题中关于现实中的关系是如何变化的。但是,文章展示了清晰的观点并配以相关的观点支持。文章的论证循序渐进,使用了很多表示时间的提示词以及连接词,但是个别有些重复。分段不够逻辑,而且一些观点没有充分的关联。使用了一些与主题相关的词汇,包括准确并自然的表达。虽然有一些词性、词义以及拼写错误,但是并不会太影响理解。使用了各种句型,但是很多不太准。语法错误和标点错误有时会干扰理解,但是不会给读者产生太大的麻烦。
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Nowadays,.
The technology has changed the peoples interaction in very enhanced manner. Earlier people usedto wait and try to find easy waysto contact their friends or relatives leaving far. In the past, there was no technology to contact others or to establish any communication between two people. Andthe drawback ofthe past communication systems was that they were too slow and were time-consuming , including the telegrams, the letter etc. Not only that,people used to be afraid to write their personal feedbacks or things to their loved ones because of information security of communication.
However,now the things have changed around.People in a long distance contact their lovesd one in ways, which improvethe interaction level between two persons. Quality of the interaction between people and peoplehas been improvedbecause they are equipped with high-techdevices which enhances their communication. There are manymediummediaavailable such as internet, called cards etc.So the technology has provided better mobility , which help people to talk or keep in touch with each other at any time anywhere in the world.
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