结论:在雅思大作文开头的两个千万不要
1.千万不要对题目本身的好坏难易进行评头论足。哪怕你心里真的觉得这个题目出得很好或者真的很弱智。
2. 千万不要在文章开头对自己的情况进行介绍,这不是口语考试,考官根本没有兴趣知道你是谁。
Topic 2-The importance of environmental protection
Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isnt it? Of course! Its really very very important!
分析:环保的重要性到底体现在哪里?讲了半天等于什么都没讲
Topic 3-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information?
Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
分析:典型的一个审题混乱+逻辑混乱+用词混乱的三乱开头。首先题目让我们谈的是以internet为代表的现代技术会不会取代传统纸媒体,而该文几乎都在讲internet怎样怎样,此一宗罪也;其次在逻辑上因为我有一个朋友很喜欢上网就能推出网络越来越重要吗?此第二宗罪;第三用词上也有问题,上网应该是surf the internet,go on the internet属于作者自己的发明创造。此外这个例子也举的非常不具有典型性,因此四罪并伐,直接拖出去斩了!
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