On the other hand, as they are busy to enter the schools and study individually with their own tutors, there are problems. They become selfish. They become careless and dont help others a lot if it is about studies. There will be no co-operations for them. Then, why are there companies for many people to work in? each of them are clever, however, there are weak parts and strong parts for each person. To co-operate is to improve this part. People talk and listen to what others thinking of and learn. That could also be a great opportunity to learn instead of learning alone with one teacher.
In conclusion, I strongly agree with that children should be taught to co-operate rather than compete. Nobody is perfect. People learn together, work together to develop each other. therefore, I want parents and teachers to educate children concentrating on co-operation, not compete and ranking them.
雅思6分作文问题分析:
从论证大主题的角度来说,这一篇的最后的收尾是co-operation 更重要的成立的,但是这位考生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划,分配给competition的文字明显多于给co-operation的,这样就给了考官一个非常合情合理的借口扣分,实在是遗憾啊!
写作建议NO.5:If it is your preference, give it more reference.
如果你更认同那个观点,那就在这个观点上多写点吧。
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