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This essay presents a clear position on the issue but is limited in its development. The author first argues that everyone needs to cooperate to solve environmental problems and then lists the ways in which we can begin to work on these problems: lowering CFCs, saving rain forests, developing alternative energy sources, and increasing food production. Although the proposed solutions are clearly relevant, they are not sufficiently explained, nor is the topics claim about the challenges of international cooperation adequately addressed.
The overall organizational plan is adequate: introduction, list of solutions , and a conclusion. Within the essay, however, the ideas are not always organized logically. In the first paragraph, for example, the sentence about our ancestors is followed abruptly by the idea that we need to work with other nations. The writer could improve this essay by clarifying the connection between ideas and by explaining these ideas in more depth.
Sentence-structure problems appear throughout the essay: We are not given this world by our ancestors we are? At times, the sentence structure is so awkward that the reader is somewhat confused about the writers intended meaning: for example, incorporating them in working.
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