语言修改
Not only scientists but also artists need creativity. The well known artist von Gothe used to say that: theres nothing more dreadful than imagination without taste. By that he emphasized the significance of taste. However, in his renowned painting of stars at night, he presented a world full of imagination such as the stars under his brush are like a whirlpool that allows us infinite fantasies about space and the universe.
本段评点
以上的例子中把作家歌德和画家梵高混淆了。不过这段中作者对于《星空》这幅画的描写给读者留下很好的印象。由此可以看出本文作者兴趣广泛,而且能用自己的语言描述梵高名画《星空》,着实不易。作者在文章写道:for instance the star under his pen is just like whirlpool that gives us infinite fantasy about space and universe.看过梵高名画《星空》的读者,应该知道作者的描述比较准确。可见,作者应该比较喜欢艺术,最起码应该看过梵高的一些画集。
第四段
Between knowledge and creativity, which one is more important? As far as I considered, knowledge is just based on imagination and fantasy of the people in the past. So we apparently draw the conclusion that ability of creativity is more critical for us than the capability of absorb certain positive knowledge.
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