Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your social experience and help you to understand other peoples feelings and learn to be considerate.
亮点评析
add,kind表达的含义都比较宽泛。add可以指数量上的增加,也可以指程度的加强,对于丰富经验、增加知识这个意思,用enrich会使表达更准确。kind从字面意义上讲是好的、善良的,用kind来形容人无法具体地表现出一个人的性格特征到底怎样,原句中是想表达考虑周到、体贴入微的特点,要准确表达这个含义应选择considerate。
2. Original: Science and technology have greatly influenced our lives and our society is changing very rapidly.
Revised: Science and technology have come to pervade every aspect of our lives and, as a result, society is changing at a speed which is quite unprecedented.
亮点评析
greatly,rapidly属于常用词,表示程度高、速度快,这样的词在表达效果上不够具体,缺乏说服力,在修改后的句子中用了pervade every aspect of our lives就具体生动地表现出科技的影响力到底有多大,其影响力已渗透到我们生活的方方面面,at a speed which is quite unprecedented意为以一种前所未有的速度,形象地道出了变化速度之快。
3. Original: Young people tend to think that real life is as nice and interesting as it is in the novels and movies, while more experienced adults think this kind of naive daydream will only be destroyed by later experiences and every one should learn to get used to common everyday life.
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