WRONG:

Subject: The Health Impact of In-House Employee Fitness Program

错误的说法：

主题：内部员工健身项目的健康影响

RIGHT:

Subject: How we can reduce absenteeis

正确的说法：

主题：我们能如何减少旷工

To wrap it up, here are the two e-mails:

不多说了，以下是两封电子邮件：

WRONG:

To: xx

Subject: The Health Impact of In-House Employee Fitness Programs

Jim,

As you know, employee absenteeism is generally recognized as an ongoing problem with a steep financial impact, both in our company and in other companies in our industries. An in-house gym will reduce absenteeism because then people will want to come to work rather than stay at home and they won't get sick so much. Therefore, we should consider allocating money for the installation of a gym at our headquarters facility. Your support for this project would be greatly appreciated.

Jill

错误的说法：

至：xx

主题：内部员工健身项目的健康影响

吉姆，

如你所知，员工旷工是一个公认的持续存在的问题，而且这一问题对我们公司和我们所处行业的其它公司都有难以承受的财务影响。内部健身房将会减少旷工，因为那时人们将会愿意来工作而不是呆在家里，而且他们也不会生那么多病了。因此，我们应该考虑拨款在总部基础设施中建造一个健身房。你对此项目的支持，我将不胜感激。

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