Some people think students should go to private secondary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
More attention has been paid to education, playing a vital role in every field (首先,这个非谓语动词词组读上去感觉不是很顺,再仔细一想,它到底是修饰谁呢?从语法上来说,似乎没有问题,但从意思表达上来说,表达不清) , by the whole society, especially parents. It is not surprising that a burning problem (这个 burning 用的很不错,大家学习一下,比如 a burning interest (强烈的兴趣爱好,即酷爱) in science ; I had a burning ambition (强烈的野心,即雄心勃勃) to become a journalist ; The burning question (严重的,紧急的问题) in this years debate over the federal budget is: whose taxes should be raised? ) for parents is whether they should send their offspring to private secondary schools. I suggest that children should go to private schools if parents can afford the expensive tuition.
结构分析:思路很清晰。前两句话是引题,最后一句话鲜明地表达自己的观点。而且在这一段就感觉句型比较丰富,不错。
语言分析:感觉这位作者的英语水平应该不错,通过某些句型和词汇的使用,让我有更高的期待,呵呵。。。
Admittedly, compared with private schools, tuition in public ones (这个错误很细小,主要是受了中文干扰,犯了逻辑主语不一致的错误!根据作者的表达, tuition in public schools 和 private schools 在比较,即学费和学校比了,不是学费和学费比了! Understand?! 而且,用 tuition 作主语,后面的谓语是 be free of charge 也是搭配不当的!应改为 compared with private schools, public schools are free of charge ) is free of charge, and then it brings no financial burden to families, more attractive to not wealthy enough ones . In addition, public schools, as usually (这个居然也错!该打,应该为 as usual ) , are closer and students can spend less time, in the case of frequent traffic congestion nowadays, on everyday commute between the school and home.
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