结构分析:这一段主要论述了 mobile phones 的缺点,论述的内容还是比较充实的,很不错,但是语言方面还是有些错误。不过,很明显,作者对一般句子的驾驭能力还是有的,长句方面似乎还有待提高。词汇方面也没什么出彩的地方,不过大致还能表达自己的 idea 。
In spite of those problems, mobiles have important advantages in transmitting information without the limit of location and time. It provide much convenience to peoples life and work , information is transmitted more fluently and more quickly, (应该是句号啦!!!) undoubtedly, it is a necessary tool for people in information age. In front of the advantages of cell phones, its disadvantages are so trial (你是想说 trivial 吧!!!) that they can be ignored, (改成分号) furthermore, people are realizing the problems associated with mobiles and are trying to improve these situations.
结构分析:这一段论述了 mobile phones 的优点,结构也是比较清晰的,但是语言方面和上一段一样,没有太华丽的句子,比较朴实,略微还有些错误。
I believe with the improvement of peoples opinion (通吗?!) and technology, the problems can be avoided and mobiles can serve us more advantageously. ( 263words )
综合评定:6分。这篇文章可以说还是比较典型的6分样卷。整篇文章,结构清晰,考官比较容易把握作者的思路,用词比较简单但能表达作者的观点,句型尚可,虽没有华丽或复杂的句子,但是一般的从句还是能够使用的。
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