Some people think the housing shortage in big cities can only be solved by the government. Do you agree or disagree?
In major cities, problem with housing shortage seems to have climbed at an alarming rate. So some people hold that the unique solution for(solution后接to) the problem depends on government action. To be frank, Im in high favor that the problem of housing shortage is the responsibility of not only governments but also individuals and enterprises. (55words)
结构分析:2+1的模式,最后一句正面提出了自己的观点。2句背景介绍句也写得不错。词数55个,稍微有些多,但即使这样也没有任何问题。唯一的瑕疵就是红色部分的问题,但是属于很小的错误,不怎么影响。
语言方面:由于语法错误不是很多(几乎没有),所以6分是可以保证的,关键是要拿7分以上的话,语言的多样性方面要求就高了!此段,作者这方面还是做的不错的,句型还是比较丰富的,所以起评分7分。
Like any else(和后面的句子连起来,总觉得很便扭!), enterprises are in pursuit of maximization of profits, taking no consideration of the reasonable utilization of land. Big companies and factories located in the city centre due to convenience in business exchange and transportation(这句话的谓语动词呢?!难道是located?那么应该是are located in). However these gigantic companies and factories have taken up so many places on city that there are few lands resources can be used in housing.
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