雅思大作文点评：国家体育队应该由谁资助？_雅思英语写作

雅思大作文点评：国家体育队应该由谁资助？

　　点评：第二段的内容写的比较简单，扩展的一般，内容不算特别充实，稍有重复之虞。且第二句的定语从句使用不正确，the capital是先行词，that是关系代词应该在后面的从句中充当主语或者宾语等成分，而此句that后面是个完整的句子就不对了。

　　注意：要想写作拿到7分以上，内容也是需要关注的。但是雅思大作文讲究的是内容充实，即论点后面有论证，并不要求同学们一味的追求内容深奥或者新颖！

　　However, the responsibility of the national sports team is to promote sports spirit and get honour which cant be estimated by the economic standard. As long as they reach a great achievement in the international competition, the glory is not only belongs to a team, but also attribute to national citizens. If the team is ran by corporations or individuals, they are affiliated to a company or a person instead of a nation.

　　点评：此段内容比第二段好些，更加充实有力，然而语言关依然没有通过，还是有些低级的错误。结构倒是一贯地比较清晰。belong是没有被动语态的，run的过去分词依然是run。

　　On the other hand, governments have ability and fruitful resource to cultivate sports teams. Though many companies and individuals have ability and talents who can train teams, their power isnt as strong as authorities. Authorities can supply the best apparatus and choose the most suitable coach and athletes from whole country even around the world. In addition, governments dont consider the economic profit of it. On the country, companies probably wont invest in training sports teams when they discover that they cant gain benefit from it.