Some people believe that national sports teams who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. Some other people think they should be funded by non-governmental resources such as corporations and individuals. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, because people as well as governments emphasis the importance of sports, the status of national sports teams has been enhanced. Hence, whether the expense of national sports teams should be paid by authorities or corporations is under controversy. In my opinion, it is the obligation that governments should support the national sports teams in terms of the financial aspect. (60w)
点评:第一段的写作是2+1,句型到具有一定的复杂和多样性,但是仍然有错误,特别是最后一句,虽为强调句,但是错得让人看不懂。第一段比较重要的是清晰且直接的表达自己的观点(一般写在最后一句),另外几句都是相关的背景介绍,一定要简洁,不要太长。第一段总字数在40词左右即可,而此篇稍有冗长之嫌。
注意:字数多可并不是件好事,一则内容繁琐或无关,二则考试时间有限!
Since sports teams cant make profit directly, they havent the privilege to use the money of the national budget. The capital that governments pay the fee of sports teams is the national revenue. If governments neednt pay their fees, the funds can be used in other area, such as medical, education and infrastructure. (53w)
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