As to myself, I agree with the latter. No one could deny that the benefit he has gained from the programs built with the tax money. And I believe that with more money, the government could offer us better welfare conditions and every one will be able to enjoy a better life as a result, besides, its a useful way to help the poor.
点评:大家会发现,这篇文章我改的很少!!!原因很简单,因为明显的错误很少!粗略地来看,文章写得还比较流畅,明显错误很少。但是有些措辞我觉得还不够精确,比如:tax system是不是改为taxation system更好; if there is no income tax which is so high是不是直接说if there is no such income tax比较简洁等等?!
换句话说,本篇作者的提高余地就不是语言的正确性了,应该朝语言的精确性和多样性方面发展,可以适当用些复杂句,用些比较好的词等等,来润饰文章。这样就可能达到7分,甚至更高了!
此外,本篇文章结构清晰,采用的是4段论的写法,一段支持,一段反对,还比较清晰,在最后一段(而不是第一段)交待了自己的观点,这种写法只要处理的好,在实战当中还是非常值得一用的。
总评:6分。不知道为什么,总感觉没什么地方能让我给7分。可能是因为文章没什么亮点之处吧。此外,值得一提的是,蓝色部分是比较好用的套句或惯用结构,作者处理得很好,没有做作的感觉。
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