Some people think we should provide help for the local communities. Others think we should give money and support to the national and international organizations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The developments of local communities and national international organizations are important results caused by social improvement. Thus a heatedly discussed issue is that whether (两个连词引导一个从句,明显错误) we should help the local communities or provide money and support to the national and international organizations (这句照抄了题目里的句子) . However in my opinion they are both necessary and complementary that we should not quit neither of them.
点评:2+1的模式,最后一句话正面表达了作者自己的观点。但是前两句话写得并不好,要么有错误,要么照抄了题目里的句子。
Local communities play an important role in our daily life. Meanwhile they contribute a lot to the cultrual development. A unforgetable memory is that I joined a local league whose aim is to help the senior citizens in need when I was in high school. The group I belonged to was respected to help an old lady who lived alone and in a poor health. Our regular visits made her didnt feel lonely any longer.Whats more,our activities jnflunced other citizens living in the same community, and they egan to help the old lady as well. A good atmosphere formed. Its not difficult to imagine how terrible our life will be without local vommunities, those who need help may receive much less cocerns, and peoples sense and awareness of helping each others whould fade away.
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