For the vast number of Internet users, the human flesh search has become an effective tool in exposing corruption, infidelity and injustice. They use it to attack celebrities as well as getting revenge on rivals and ex-lovers. Thousands of individual users piece together every detail of a persons life and then publish them online. There is no doubt that the human flesh search can have positive effects on supervising the authorities. It has exposed dozens of corrupt cases, but it is open to abuse and innocent people are seeing their private lives laid bare to the public in the name of revenge. Unlike Google and Baidu, the power of this search engine is limitless, and has the potential to destroy lives. No matter whether the person involved is right or wrong, these searches will always hurt them. So I think it is time to take actions to stop this behavior.
Without proper control and regulation, human flesh searches can easily develop into cyber violence. At the moment, the issue is a mess and we need fresh legislation to protect personal data as soon as possible.
分析:上文第一段没什么大问题,两句导入句加上一句主题句,表明作者反对人肉搜索。问题出在第二段:该段没有延续主题思想句预示的内容,解释人肉搜索如何破坏了人们的私生活以及造成了什么样的问题,而是花大半的篇幅来解释人肉搜索的好处、过程和效果,最后只用了小半篇幅回到主题上来。应该说第二段前一大半的内容作为文章主题段的背景信息未尝不可,但放在第二段段首就很不合适,违反了英语写作线性发展的思维模式。
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