②③However, when it comes to whether its positive effects outweigh the negative ones, opinions tend to vary. This essay aims to explore the issue from different perspectives and draw some suggestive conclusions.
语言点评:注意短语:explore sth from different perspectives, draw some suggestive conclusions.
主题1段: 交代机械化对个人和社会的正面影响。共⑤句话。
①No one can deny the fact that modern machinery brings tremendous convenience and benefits to our lives .
语言点评:该句此段的中心论点。注意双重否定表肯定句型No one can deny the fact that 句式的使用;排山倒海结构 brings tremendous convenience and benefits 的使用。
②With the advent of little gadgets such as computers and mobile phones, people can conduct their business without meeting each other face to face, thus improving working efficiency, saving time and energy and gaining more leisure time of their own.
语言点评:此句作为第一句的支持句,以computers and mobile phones 为例,指出电脑手机等通讯工具的发明使得人们极大地提高了自己的工作效率以及有了更多的闲暇时间可以支配。注意with以及thus improving等结构引导的伴随状语表因果。由此得出启示:表达因果不一定要用because 或者是so这样的老熟人。
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