Unlike the twenties, the sixties and seventies utilized看到了吧!替换了use这个低级词汇 the media in a way that appealed to吸引~替换了attract those searching for truth in a lost and confused world在world 前面加了lost and confused~非常好!但是其实还有更加好的~我个人认为complex and perplexed放在这里也不错~更加押韵~读起来更加美. Martin Luther King Jr. realized the impact of the media on society during his campaign for civil rights. King urged小词的功力 his followers to with
stand any abuse that they might encounter because the media will take their peacefulness into the homes of their society很少同学能够举例子在两句话描写出例子对于自己文章有用的地方~这里peacefulness/abuse都用得很好~和可惜~encounter没有注意重复了!可以confront. By doing so, King successfully began to change the traditional view of race这句话不算美~但是很少人用by doing表达自己的观点~并且~运用了一个短句~和上面的长句相对应. Americans began to sympathize great! with the protesters because of前面用了due to这里替换了~虽然我也不太喜欢这个词但是后面的词用得很好! the undeserved turmoil这个用的好! they faced at the hands of the government, hands of the government用了一个比喻的手法!. As a result,作者避免运用therefore/thus America relinquished 这个词用得棒!替换了give up等等the Jim Crow laws 这里体现了作者历史知识的深刻and saw many other groups press for their individual rights as well. Television cameras rolled as Cesar Chavez organized the migrant workers in California and as Bella Abzug and Gloria Steinham linked arms to protest the lack of womens rights. rolled用得好!而后面的比喻用得更好!里面的历史渊源更加使我们不可及!
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