【习作题目二】下面是Sandy 同学的基本情况,请你恰当地运用所学频度副词写一篇60-80字的小短文,可以适当发挥
【学生习作】
Sandy is a bit heavy. She likes playing computer games. She plays it about ① one or two times a day. She enjoys watching TV, ②also. Sometimes she watches TV for four or five hours in the evening, ③and she often goes to bed late. She looks ④not healthy. She hates playing sports. She likes to eat dessert and ⑤fishes. She eats them every day. She hardly ever eats fruit or drinks milk, but she loves junk food. She drinks cola and lemonade every day.
【老师点评】本文能根据表格中的要点展开,内容充实,合理使用了频度副词,若能稍加留意一些词汇的用法,将会有长足的进步。
①在表达次数时,一次用once,两次用twice,三次或三次以上用times(次),故one or two times要改为once or twice。
②also意为“也,它位于句中,一般不在句末,在肯定句的句末要用too。故本句可以改为“She also enjoys watching TV或“She enjoys watching TV, too。
③由于两句之间用了逗号,and表达的是并列关系,本句是表示前一句动作的结果,是因果关系,故应把and改为so。
④本句写成了中国式英语,look是系动词,后应接形容词。当表达不健康时,可以在healthy前加否定前缀un。故原句可以改为“She looks unhealthy。
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