第1句:A disputed issue which drew our attention recently(时态错,有副词recently,用现在完成时比较好) is that(原以为作者此处用that引导一个表语从句,但是很明显,接下来的内容是一个combat between A and B的结构,根本就不是句子,此为严重错误!!!)the combat between parents complaints about too much commerce-based advertisements which provided children with nothing but merely meaningless staff and the companies positive attitudes towards the useful information through this(改为the比较好) media.
第2句:Since nowadays we are all evolved(此处估计应该是involved,否则很难懂作者想表达什么!!!) in this information age that get(主谓一致的错误,先行词是information age,是单数!!!) us much exposure(其实这里用expose sb to sth.的结构更符合这个词的习惯用法!!!) to a bunch of advertisements with various information, it is surely a dilemma if someone is asked to judge between the two parties above.
印象分:第1段给我的感觉是,作者的水平应该是6分,但是错误太多,起评分5分。
People are largely dependent on informative details from advertisements without which making their choices would be harder. This point can be strongly proved by those annual fashionable trends youngsters follow. We can easily found (低级错误,应该为can easily find)a certain group of people who wear the exact sort of perfume or the same hairstyle on almost each head. There is no way if a brand-new product spreads nationwide immediately after its birth just by sharing ideas with friends around you. (此句,前半句的意思表达地不是很清楚,请大家一起研究一下,作者到底想说什么?!)We only discuss about qualifications of this product(产品的质量应该说成quality吧) after knowing it from advertisements on TVs, posters or other mass intermediates. (96words)
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