People hold the opinion that a sacrifice always come(很明显,主谓一致错误) along with a reward, which reflects upon(这个词组的意思是反省) this topic. What parents are not satisfied with, from my view, is actually childrens overacting upon(应该为to) advertisements instead of an advertisement itself. Advertisements, tough (应改为though)slightly blur consumers eyes, are on their way of helping us a reasonable choice(此句,我不理解).(55words) (344words)
总评:全文有太多的错误,主要是因为用了复杂的句子,某些地方是使用了较难的词,5分。
但是,这篇文章的作者具有一个特色:写长句的潜力!!!比起一般的5分的作文,这篇文章是完全具有6分甚至7分的潜力的,因为它有长句,有难词!!!关键就是正确性太低。如果在正确性方面能够得以提高,那么此为作者在作文方面还是非常有前途的!!!
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