Some parents think advertising tells too much information about snacks and toys to children. But companies think advertising also shows useful information. Discuss both sides and give your opinion according to your own experience and knowledge.
A disputed issue which drew our attention recently is that the combat between parents complaints about too much commerce-based advertisements which provided children with nothing but merely meaningless staff and the companies positive attitudes towards the useful information through this media. Since nowadays we are all evolved in this information age that get us much exposure to a bunch of advertisements with various information, it is surely a dilemma if someone is asked to judge between the two parties above. Nevertheless, I will choose to be on the company side as far as I am concerned.
结构分析:2+1的模式,最后1句为主体句,前2句介绍背景,没有照抄原文。从内容上来讲,此段完全符合要求。但是从词数上来看,有点太多了!!!第一段还是言简意赅的比较好,不要过分长,这样也不好!!!
语言分析:很明显,此篇文章作者是具有一定英语水平的,极力追求长句。可是,仔细分析后,前两句长句都有错!!!这样的话,最多也只有5分。大家必须明白一个道理:先追求正确性,再追求多样性。否则,只会得不偿失!!!
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