雅思写作典型病句分析_雅思英语写作

雅思写作典型病句分析

　　be occupied 应改为 taken away。

　　正： Their opportunities to enter college may be taken away by those students with athletic talents.

　　误：The university also benefit itself by his athletic fame due to enrol and train the students who have special athletic talents. For example, Oxford and Cambridge are very famous in the world. The reason may be owned a little to their boat race games.

　　这是两个很好的句子，因为其中一个是论点，另一个是论据。这种用事例、数据等证据来支持论点的做法使人感到客观。很多考试的作文会由于英文水平欠佳、缺乏论据、受汉语表达方式的影响等原因而显得口号多，实际内容不扎实，得不到理想的分数。

　　此句有若干错误，请对比前后两句。

　　正：The university also promotes its athletic fame by enrolling and training the students who have special athletic talents. For example, Oxford and Cambridge are very famous in the world. One of reasons probably is the annual boat race on river Thames.

　　误：Universities should give equal opportunities to students who study very well as well as those who can contribute to some special areas.

　　作者用 as well as 表达既，也。使用此词组时应特别注意，很多人会在这里犯错误。如果想表示既，也，可以用 as well as。如：This game is good for parents as well as for children. 此句中包含了一个逻辑关系，就是 game 一词与孩子的关系更密切，与家长的关系不那么密切。如果译成汉语，孩子应该放在家长之前：这个游戏既对孩子好，也对家长好。用英文表达此逻辑关系时，这两个名词的先后与汉语相反。因此，在写作时不宜轻用 as well as，如要用，请斟酌逻辑关系，把握词序的正确。