Now she is possible to communicate with her granddaughter easily. Granny Wang began to learn to use the computer half a year ago. Just as the old saying goes, it’s never too late to learn. Jobs are changing and developing so fast that if we don’t continue our study, we will fall behind in the competition. In order to keep up with the fast changing world we have to continue our study all our life.

　　1. 初稿在对图画进行描述时,内容完整,清晰地传达出了图画中包含的主要信息；此外,作者也结合生活实际论述了自己的观点,强调了终身学习的重要性。

　　2. 文章存在的问题:

　　①句式单调,语言不够简练,如:文章第一句话和第二句话可以用定语从句连接,这样就可以避免下文的人称代词混乱现象。

　　②有些句子不符合英语表达习惯,如:Now she is possible to communicate with her granddaughter easily.应改为:Now the Internet makes it possible for her to communicate with her granddaughter easily.

　　③个别句子之间过渡不自然,如"Just as the old saying goes, it’s never too late to learn."和前后句子之间的衔接都不是很自然。

　　成稿:

　　From the picture we can see that Granny Wang is sending an e-mail to her granddaughter, who is studying in America. Sometimes they even chat face to face online. However, not long ago Granny Wang didn’t know how to send e-mails. If she wanted to see her granddaughter, she had to go to America to visit her in person. It cost her too much money and took up too much time.      Then she learned how to use the Internet and now it is possible for her to communicate with her granddaughter easily. She began to use the computer half a year ago. Even though it was hard for her, she never thought of giving it up. This reminds me of the old saying, it’s never too late to learn. Nowadays everything is changing and developing so fast that if we don’t continue to learn new things, we will fall behind in this fast changing world.

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